You were there

Posted: November 10, 2011 in Ramblings of a sober Poet
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We watched the sunset.
The last rays of the day
danced on the waters surface.
The birds flying over us,
flight reflected on the silver wetness.
We sat, backs turned on the truth
I hugged you,
a white flower with small thorns
A depiction of what we have become
The hills swallowed the sun,
day moved behind the horizon
We sat, backs turned on the night
trying to build a new day, together.
We watched the sunset
The last sun ray of hope for
what we want to become.

©Richard Quaz Roodt(2011)

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This poem is linked to d’Versepoets.com OpenLinkNight #20 and   In Tandem#18

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Comments
  1. Jinksy says:

    backs turned on the truth

    This so often happens – Let’s hope looking to the future works its magic on all people who feel this way at present! Thank you for riding the Tandem again this week. 🙂

  2. kez says:

    so sad and yet so beautiful …thank you x

  3. wolfsrosebud says:

    do like the white flower with small thorns and hills swallowing the hills… nice pace in this piece… hope for the hopeless

  4. tinkwelborn says:

    there’s a sweet sentimentalism to this piece, having come to the end of life myself, I can identify with the message herein.
    I love the way you put the night, dark, future behind them….and hope for want fulfillment.
    I also ‘love’ the I hugged you….a white flower with small thorns….beautiful line.

    very, very good poem.

  5. apoetryman says:

    Wow fantastic ~ the contrasts of beauty mixed with sadness and pain at the longing to work ~ loved it

  6. claudia says:

    you have no idea how much i can relate to this..love the sitting with backs turned on the night
    trying to build a new day, together…love the hope in this..

  7. brian miller says:

    i really like the hope for what want to become at the end…made me think of growing old together…your pic evokes that as well….

  8. Laurie Kolp says:

    This is lovely, Quaz.

  9. Caty says:

    such a sentimental and hopeful piece!

  10. zongrik says:

    i used to like sitting like that and watching the ducks on the charles

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