Wild men , tame men.

Posted: November 27, 2011 in Ramblings of a sober Poet
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I’ve seen tame spirits

dressed in the wildest robes.

Concrete facades

for silky fragile souls.

I’ve seen good men

sacrifice their true selves

on altars of vanity.

Charred remains speak of

old defeated kingdoms.

Kings in fools paradise

I’ve seen wild spirits

dressed in the tamest robes

fragile silky facades

for concrete souls

I’ve seen bad men

sacrifice themselves

on altars of repentance and remorse.

Smoking remains speak of

the rise of a new kingdom.

Relinquishing the title of

king, to a paradise of fools.

©Richard Quaz Roodt(2011)

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This poem is linked to d’Versepoets.com(Poetics prompt:wild) and One single impression (Prompt a fools paradise.) and Poetry Pantry 77 and Poetry Picnic 15

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Comments
  1. David King says:

    This really drew me in: a measured and thoughtful take on the prompt. Congrats.

  2. claudia says:

    wow..like david..this drew me in…very good thoughts..some of the wildest people i met seemed to be the most boring and unimpressive on first sight…and vice versa…

  3. Lisa at Greenbow says:

    Such people are skillfully described here. I think I have met them all.

  4. brian miller says:

    i find it interesting that you repeat concrete and fools…the concrete particularly as it contrast the duplicity you point out…nice write…i too know them…

  5. Ramesh Sood says:

    This is lovely write… facades ..only if one could peep through them… well said..

  6. I was knocked out (in the positive way of the word) … what a wonderfull poem … full of energy.

  7. enjoyed your thoughts on wild men and stuff.

  8. hedgewitch says:

    I really really like this Quaz–the way you’ve transposed and mirror-imaged it, the simplicity is deceptive because there’s a lot here under the hood. An excellent indictment of civilization’s ruses.

  9. Quaz says:

    thank you so much for taking time to visit guys!

  10. Love the contrast & compare. This is a great fresh reminder not to judge people too quickly. I like the final lines too.

  11. Morning says:

    very fantastic write.
    🙂

  12. first stanza flipped into the second to state something different, now that was mad cool. I dig it! 🙂
    my entry: http://lynnaima.wordpress.com/2011/11/24/your-asogwe/

  13. Write Girl says:

    This poem really draws me in. Enjoyed your take on foolish paradise. I’m glad I had the opportunity to read your work.

  14. Amity says:

    Beautifully written…what a fool’s paradise, indeed!

  15. Laura Maria says:

    Impressive poem! You did an awesome job with the prompt. I really enjoyed reading this.

  16. kez says:

    they say the quietest ones are the worse ….perhaps the wildest …loved this thank you x

  17. You’ve seen a lot Quaz and the repetition of it worked so well. I especially liked your close.

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